Unforgettable Holiday
The most unforgettable holiday which I had is when I went to Untung Jawa Island with my friend 2 years ago. Untung Jawa Island is situated in Seribu Island. I went to there by a car with 8 others people. That were Tami ,Yoy ,Anam, alun ,rande,nana,ridha, and mami. Because of that, the car was completely jammed. We gathered at Tami’s house and went to there at 1 P.M. On the road, we were stuck in a traffic jam, so we arrived in Marina Harbor at 5 P.M. Because it was getting late, we immediately rent a ship for going to Untung Jawa Island. 10 minutes later, we arrived in the dock of Untung Jawa Island. Then, we were looking for a home to stay, but all of home had been full. Finally, we slept in a rent mat near the beach. That’s all about my unforgettable holiday with my friend.
Topic : The most unforgettable holiday.
Controlling idea : I went to Untung Jawa Island with my friend 2 years ago.
Concluding sentences :That’s all about my unforgettable holiday with my friend.
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