She is Something
Novi Yanti is one of my friends that are spoiled. I knew her when she came up to me in the first class. She lives in North Bekasi. She was the first child of three brothers, although her first child as the last child in nature.Once I've lived in a rent house for 1 month. I'm very happy know her because she is very care to me and always makes me smile and laugh. Moreover we often stories about the family and campus. Sometimes she stories something about class, she complains in the lesson. She wanna be a perfect person in doing her life. When her wish doesn't appropriate with real it, she will feel down. If she feels like that, she feels fail and can't do it. Sometimes I feel disappointed with her because it makes down. So, I hope she can positive thinking and don't give up in doing to something..
Hi Dwi,
BalasHapusIn your sentence: "we often stories...", I think you do not to add 's' in the word 'story' because the subject is 'we'.
Besides, it will be better if you write: "we often share"
OMG, I forgot that.
BalasHapusThank bil for ur comment, I will be careful to my grammar in the next writing.
The title is nice, and I expect to find 'something' more beyond ur writing. Ok, start from TS. It's good already, but ur CS does not relevant yet to ur TS. Please make it in that way ya. Dear, u hafta be really aware on grammar and also the rules of using complex sentence. Let's take a look at these sentences.
BalasHapus"She was the first child of three brothers, although her first child as the last child in nature". Honestly, I can't get the point yet.
"I'm very happy know her because she is very care to me and always makes me smile and laugh
". Make ur sentence parallel.
All in all there are several little things u should make up; punctuation, choice of words, and the rules of parts of speech. Em waiting 4 ur better writing next time.